We have decided to make a new script for Hidden. Below is the new script:
In our script the stage directions are coloured in red and the camera shots are in green, sound is in a blue coloured text and finally the dialouge in black.
Close up of a girls shoes jumping/landing onto the ground tracking shot as she walks through over grown grass
Amy: remind me again why we agreed to do this?
Gemma: Because it will be fun and anyway we need practice camping if were going to go backpacking
Rosie: Yeah but I was thinking we could just stay in hotels
Gemma: stop complaining
As they stop talking they arrive at where their camping. They put down their bags. As they do a medium long shot is used of the girls standing in the field.
They begin to look around as they do there is a figure in the staring at them through some bushes a long shot is used.
Gemma: Lets have a look around and see if there is anywhere better to put the tents
They all split up looking around the field.
Long shot is used of the girls walking in different directions cuts to a point of view shot of Amy looking at the barn. Medium long shot as she begins to walk down the hill. Close up of her touching the chains towards the entrance. Cuts to an medium long shot of Amy walking into the barn.
She begins to look around moving belongings in the barn
Amy: guys come here, we might not have to set up a tent afterall.
Gemma: what is this place?
Rosie: just some barn thats been left
Amy: yeah but look at all this weird stuff
Gemma: maybe we shouldn't be here, the person obviously has something wrong with them
Amy: come on it was your idea to come here lets just stay here for the night
Cuts to a close up of the killer looking through the barn
We start to see what appears to be a clown/mask
Rosie: I'll go and get the bags and bring them down here
Point of view shot of Rosie walking to the bags
Rustling is heard
Point of view shot she looks around and sees a figure she goes to have a further look she sees the figure moving away
Rosie: GUYS!!! come here quick
Cuts to a point of view shot of the two girls running to Rosie
Gemma: what is it?
Rosie: I swear I just saw a man staring at me, I went to have a closer look but he had gone
Amy: don't be stupid if you did see a man he was probably just walking his dog
Rosie: there was something about him though it wasn't right maybe Gemma is right maybe we should leave.
Amy: It's absolutely fine nothings going to happen to us. God I didn't know you were all scared of everything. Lets get the bags and go back inside
Gemma: I'm sure we'll be fine Rosie and I have my car anyway so we can just leave later if you don't like it
Tracking shot of them walking back to the barn
Rosie: yeah because i'm sure walking up a pitch black hill to your car will reassure me, what is all this stuff?
Close ups and fragmentation shots of each character looking at something different
Gemma: i'm not sure but it's best not to touch any of it
Amy grabs one of the objects and starts playing with it
Rosie: Amy stop it, you don't know who's it is. It might belong to that man I saw
Amy: oh don't start with that again its just stuff that people leave down here instead if going to the tip
Gemma: it's pretty weird stuff though
Rosie looks out into the field sees the figure long shot is used
Rosie: (whispering) can you see him staring at us
Just as the others look the man dissapears
Gemma: Rosie there's no one there stop trying to scare us.
Rosie: i'm not it was the same man that was looking at me before and think this is his barn I really don't like the look of him maybe we should leave.
Amy: For the last time Rosie there is no one there and even if there is are you really going to walk in the dark back to the car with him out there? No? Yeah that's what I was thinking
Rosie: I'm going back to the car are any of you coming?
Amy: i'm going to stay here
Gemma looks at Rosie with sympathy
Gemma: i'm sorry rosie but i'm staying too, just stay till morning and we'll leave first thing
Rosie: No i'm going with or without you
Long shot used of rosie leaving cuts to a shot reverse shot of gemma and amy
Gemma: Amy we can't let her walk to the car by herself anything could happen
Amy: She's not really going to walk to the car, I give her two minutes before she's back here saying she was just joking
There is an ellipsis of time. Gemma is by the entrance of the barn while amy is sat on the floor.
Medium long shot- Gemma is tapping her feet, shuffling about and chewing her nails. Medium close up
Gemma: Amy she has been gone for ages, I think we should go look for her, she would have text us she made it back to the car
Medium long shot
Amy: Stop worrying I bet she's gone home but wants to scare us so isn't texting us and besides we don't have signal down here anyway so how would even get a text?
Gemma: Yeah maybe your right I still think we should try and ring her I have a bit of signal still
We hear the dialling tone of the phone, we then hear her ringtone being played
Gemma: Can you hear that
Amy: yeah but that isn't Rosie's normal ringtone
Gemma: what is it then? She's not answering i'll ring back in a minute
Amy: It stopped as soon as you hung up it must be her phone. ring it again I'll look for it
Point of view shot is used of Amy looking for the phone
Amy: it's in here she must have forgotten it
Gemma: No she was using it as a torch when she left, I told you we shouldn't have let her go!
Amy is still looking for it finds it inside a dirty jar
Amy: i've found it, are you sure she wasn't holding a torch?
Gemma: certain, Don't you understand? If the phone is in here it must mean that she was telling the truth that she did see a man and now god knows what’s happened to her.
Amy: Calm down i'm sure everything is fine and she's just trying to trick us
old crackling music is heard
Gemma: what is that, something isn't right we need to find Rosie and get out of here.
Amy: It's your phone, maybe someone is ringing you
Gemma: my phone doesn't have that song on there don't you get it Rosie was right that man doesn't want us here, he's had access to our stuff he could be hearing everything right now we need to leave!
Amy: Gemma Stop it, it's just rosie playing a trick on us things like this don't happen round here she's just trying to make us scared as payback for not listening to her earlier.
Gemma: I want to leave Amy.
Amy: what? So Rosie can say “ I knew I could scare you”
Gemma: it's not about that, something just isn't right.
Gemma looks out into the field to see a dark figure staring at her and amy he starts walking towards them
Gemma: LOOK HE'S THERE WE NEED TO RUN!
As Amy looks there is nothing there
Amy: There is no one there
Amy looks around the room- panning shot
There is an object with clothe over it that has been there the whole time the girls have been there
Amy: If you really want to go we'll leave in a minute I just want to see what is under here, it might be worth some money.
Gemma: Hurry!! I don't like it here
A close up of Amy's hand reaching for the clothe she pulls the clothe off where the killer is sat dressed as a dinosaur with a mask on
Black out
The End
